Chaos Island: Newcomers (book 1)

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Chaos Island: Newcomers (book 1)

Postby raptor33 » Thu May 27, 2010 1:06 pm

March 23, 2041.
Isla Muerta.
Lower One research facility.
Housing Block 5e.

Zack awoke for his first day at Lower One. There was a reminder to be at the Main Hall at 5:00. He had one hour. Perhaps I should look around a bit? he thought. He went through the various passageways until he came to door labled DinosaurLockout. There was a hand scanner on the door. Zack decided to try the hand scanner, and was suprised when it worked. On the other side, there was another door down a hallway. The scanner on this one was... different. It looked more like a dinosaur's claws. That's ridiculous. Why would they make an ID for dinosaurs?

Zack decided to head back. He would be late if he didn't hurry. He also noticed that there was no one around. The hallways were deserted. Running even faster, he almost hit the wall when he went around a blind corner. My god, that was close. He at last found the Main Hall. It too, was empty. Except for Richmond, the owner of Lower One. He didn't even look up, he just called Zack to sit down.

"I'm sure you'd like to know why you're here. Well, the Lower One is technically a classified project, however you should know that it has something to do with you. When we found you, do you remember what I said to you?" Zack nodded.
"You said that there was something interesting about me." Now it was Richmond's turn to nod.
"Yes, and although I'm not allowed to tell you why, I think I can help you find out." He said this in a nervous voice, as if he was being watched.

And he was. Not by humans, but by the hyper-intelligent dinosaurs that had found a way in recently. Although the raptor's weren't hunting, they knew it was part of the gig: Give an impression to the new guy, get free food, run away like heck. Richmond caught a passing glimpse of the raptors and pretended to be even more nervous. He pointed them out to Zack. "This is not good." Little did Zack know that was the keyword the raptors heard to begin surrounding them.

The raptors, as planned, surrounded Zack and Richmond. They were moving deliberately closer, taking Zack's attention from one raptor to the next, until he was in a daze. Richmond mouthed the words "run" and the raptors leaped for Zack. Zack, terrified, was about to run when he realized they were behind him too. The raptors didn't even scratch Zack, and when the painful sensation of being eaten alive did not come to him, he opened his eyes and saw the raptor staring straight into his eyes.

There were barks and yelps all around, which only made Zack fall into a daze again. He fainted when the adrenaline left him. Richmond knew this was not part of the plan but hurriedly told the raptors the food is by the Hatchery, and they should run if they want to get it.

Zack awoke from his daze, or at least, he thought so until he saw his own body. What the...!? I must be dreaming. That's it, all a dream...... Hearing a final bark from a raptor that he somehow knew as Skar telling him to get moving or be left behind.... What!? I can understand them? What the heck is going on here? Richmond saw the hesitation and quickly said to Zack, "Your talents are progressing faster than expected. You aren't in your body anymore --- you've taken control of one the raptor."

Zack didn't want to believe it but he heard a voice telling him it was true. Zack realized that this must be the raptor he had taken control of... his name was Windclaw. Zack again was dazed, and again fainted. He awoke in his own body some hours later. Windclaw was gone. Richmond was gone. He was in his room. The door was locked on both sides because a tyrannosaur had apparently broken into Lower One.

March 26, 2041.
Labratory Block 9c.

Zack, on his third day here and his first in the lab, had on two other occasions ended up outside of his body and in a dinosaur. But enough of that. In the lab, where Richmond was waiting and so was Terry, the head researcher at Lower One, there was a heavily restrained tyrannosaur --- the one from 3 days ago when Lower One was locked down. "Hey Zack. I like you to meet Terry. She's the head researcher here at Lower One. Me and her have discussed your progress, and we think it's time to step it up a notch --- the first notch, to be exact." Zack fell into a daze and found himself heavily bound by high-strength cables. I must be in the rex's body.
WHAT DO YOU THINK NITWIT? a deep, powerful voice that must belong to the rex said. Zack was terrified and almost lost control of the beast.
"Why do I get the feeling we need to get those binds off of him, and fast?" It was Terry. Richmond agreed and they got the bonds off of Zack/Rex who rolled over to stand then paused. Zack was fighting a losing battle. That's it, give control to me! The rex said. Zack would have believed him if he didn't see Richmond wave his hand towards the large cargo doors. Zack's vision was fuzzy and he almost crushed himself --- that is to say, his real body. The cargo doors were open and Zack managed to fight the rex's mind enough to get past them. The struggle for control left him weak and he returned to his body.

Richmond had closed the door to Zack's room and waited for Zack to wake up. He didn't wait long. "What the.....!? Ah.... my head....." Zack said. Richmond began to speak.
"That figures. I'm sorry, you almost died. I shouldn't have expected you to be able to control a rex for any amount of time."
"Why... why was that so much harder than controling Windclaw?" Zack implied.
"I haven't the faintest. However, the rex probably knew you were weaker and used that against you." Richmond explained.

"Windclaw, are you coming?" Skar barked.
"Yeah, but I'm wondering... how did the human control me?" Windclaw replied with a bark.
"Because you and him are connected..." A large spinosaur appeared, almost causing the pack to scatter. "...you share more than you know." And with that, he just left. The pack, shaken by the appearance of the spino, all agreed that Windclaw should leave it unless it happened again.

April 2, 2041.
Housing Block 5e.
*Notice: This is the very beginning of the transformation.*
*Double notice: Since spno's are bigger than humans, (a) it will take longer and (b) he must transform so that he is larger every time.*

Zack awoke after a horrible night's sleep to find he had numerous small bumps on his back, along with the fact his spine seemed longer. He had smallish claws on his hands and feet, and some of his fingers (and toe) appeared to be smaller. What he could not see was that his tailbone was also longer, and his teeth had become a tad sharper. He needed to duck under his room door, so you can safely say he's larger.

He felt like he HAD to go to that weird DinoLock hallway, as if something was calling him. When he arrived, and opened the first door, he saw none other than Windclaw. He felt dizzy and, for the second time, took over Windclaw.

Seeing his own limp body, he turned his attention to the large door designed for dinosaurs. Where are you going? We're supposed to see Richmond! Suprised the raptor knew Richmond's name, he replied.
Outside. Somewhere away from here.
That's a bad idea you fool! I came here for a reason you idiot!
And what would that be?
Can you BE so stupid? I came here to find you and warn you! Zack wondered what Windclaw wanted to warn him from.
Fine. You lead. Zack gave the raptor control, and pretty much sat back and waited. Unfortunately, when he was not controling Windclaw, he could not see what Windclaw was doing.
Here.
Finally! When Zack took control back, he found Richmond. Sleeping. Zack was about to wake him up when an alarm clock does it for him. Richmond, having woke up, saw, at first, a raptor that was going to kill him. However, he recognized the markings on the raptor - Windclaw.

April 2, 2041.
Housing Block 12t.

Zack, in control of Windclaw, was about to speak to Richmond when he remembered that humans don't understand raptors. Luckily, Richmond spoke first, as Windclaw just stood there, waiting for him. "If you want to speak, get back to your body, wherever it is." Zack/Windclaw and Richmond all pretty much ran down the hallway to find Zacks body. It had been deteced by the door sensor and the door remained open - thus letting Windclaw's pack to enter.

Zack, back in his own body, was startled when he still heard Windclaw. Are you going to stand there or not?
"I heard that... but why?"
"Maybe you're progressing faster?"
Wait, slow down - tell him to shut up - and how the hell can you hear me? You're not controlling me anymore...
"Windclaw said for me to tell you to shut up." Zack enjoyed the expression on Richmond's face. Priceless. Richmond didn't speak.
I think I know why... there was a spinosaurus a few days ago, and it said that you and me are connected. Whatever that means. Zack was tired after controlling Windclaw and just passed out on the floor.

Zack! Wake up! Damn. WAKE UP YOU FOOL!
I'm awake! I'm awake! Dammit Windclaw, couldn't you... you're not Windclaw.
I'M SKAR YOU IDIOT! WAKE UP, AND GET THE HELL OUT OF MY BODY!

Zack awoke in his room again. He seemed to be even larger and the bumps on his back more pronounced. Also, again he could not see his tailbone was larger, his teeth were sharper, his limbs longer, and he had completely lost two of his fingers - on each hand. Morning, little spino. Zack was completely shocked. This was not a raptor. It was a spino! But Zack was in his own body, so how... Did you sleep well, my son?
Zack couldn't believe what he just heard. Not in the least could he be the offspring of a different species...

But he was. Zack, along with Windclaw, were mixed up when artificially created. Windclaw ended up as a raptor because of the mistake, and Zack ended up with both human and spinosaur DNA. The mental signals created allowed the spino to realize his DNA was used and therefore they were technically his half-clones and therefore sons.

April 4, 2041.
East shore.

"This my boy, is where the electric fences end - nothing but clear, blue, open water for another 50 miles. Unfortunately, after Sorna, things get worse.... a lot worse."
"Can you not stare at the abandoned cloning center like you know Doomfyre.... I should not have said that."
"Said what?" Zack was cut off by a roar from over in the cloning center. "What WAS that?"
"Eh..... nothing."
"Yeah... I'll believe that. Seriously, what the hell was that?"
"Um..... a rex?"
"Rexes don't sound like that."
"Giga?"
"Now you're being stupid." Zack was getting fed up with this.
"Allosaur?"
"There are no allosaurs here."
"Compy?"
"OH COME ON BE SERIOUS YOU IDIOT!" Really ticked off now, Zack lost it and punched Richmond in the jaw. "When I want an answer, you give me an answer!"
"Okay okay! That was most likely Doomfyre, your father."
"You mean really big spino using telepathy?"
"Yeah, that's the one." Zack was already running towards the cloning center at full speed, ready to meet his "father" and get some answers.

April 4, 2041.
Cloning Center
***This is only a half chapter, the other half will be in the second book***

It was quiet... very quiet. Apparently everything had been scared away by the roar. Zack felt as if he was changing faster the closer and closer he got to Doomfyre. He also felt that he was being watched... but not by Windclaw.

A large number of Barys, Spinos, and even some Suchos were gathering around the building. Many knew Doomfyre, for both good and bad reasons. Among the assortment of piscivores was Terror, a massive Suchomimus bent on killing Doomfyre.

Zack was in fact changing faster, but simply because he had stopped resisting it. Soon he would be a complete spino. Doomfyre knew this. He had spies in every part of the island. While he was the main predator on all three islands, he was getting old and needed a successor to finish his work, to reach the mainland and finally obliterate the humans who trapped them here, on these three islands.

This concludes Chaos Island: Newcomers!
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Postby raptor33 » Thu May 27, 2010 1:12 pm

Ladies and Gentlemen, it is with great pleasure I give you the newest wonder of the FanFic world, Chaos Island. 2nd Chapter now open! I also do not take suggestions often, but I might if enough people were to ask for it or if Godzilla gave the idea. I normally listen to Godzilla.

Also, sidenote: if I have no reason to care if I use heck or hell in my FanFic, especially if it is speech, then please inform me and I'll change all the hecks to hells.
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Postby Shadow » Thu May 27, 2010 5:21 pm

So, the dino's can talk to the humans? o.O

I like it, just a tad confusing.
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Postby raptor33 » Thu May 27, 2010 7:44 pm

*slaps face*
Yeah.... about that, you realize that Zack is *effectively* mind-controlling the dino so he's actually hearing the dino's thoughts?

*slaps face again*
You deserved that. For asking a stupid question.


Note: It is not actually mind control, just like Reily's telepathy wasn't really Telpathy, more of the fact that the dinosaurs understand the humans already (at least the smart ones do)
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Postby Evil Eye » Thu May 27, 2010 8:10 pm

SNTDTHAB.

You know. Cause everyone knows every acronym ever created.
But since we know you don't:

Someone needs to deflate their head a bit.
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Postby Shadow » Thu May 27, 2010 8:47 pm

I asked a perfectly logical question because you didn't make it clear that the dinos can understand the humans.

So, your slaps are nulled. Sorry.

TACP.

Take a chill pill. Also, this wasn't meant to flare tempers or anything, I'm in an argumentative mood.
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Postby Godzilla Forever » Fri May 28, 2010 1:30 am

Looks good.

Oh, and raptor- THAT was uncalled for. Shame on you. >:E

Oh, and I call for tyrannosaurus- raptor mutant. Maybe even call it Tyrannoraptor. 8)
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Postby raptor33 » Sat May 29, 2010 2:27 pm

but what about a spino-human?

I won't spoil the WHOLE thing, but that was my idea from the beginning.
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Postby Godzilla Forever » Sat May 29, 2010 2:38 pm

I don't know, I mean, it IS your fan-fic. Do whatever you want.
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Postby raptor33 » Sat May 29, 2010 3:29 pm

I have great pleasure in giving you the next part and 3rd chapter!

I also would like to possibly inform you of the results for the suggestion of a Tyrannoraptor has been half fulfilled. There is a spinoraptor although the spino part of it is inactive.

So enjoy having this plot twist and longer chapters than Doom Island!


Note: If you are confused, I can explain *hopefully* so you aren't confused anymore:

Zack and Windclaw understand each other because of their shared DNA and the fact that Zack's control is getting more and more powerful.

Zack and his father understand each other because his father has even stronger control, due to an experiment from 10 years ago.

Windclaw and other dinosaurs obviously understand each other for the same reason that dinosaurs understood other species in Isla Sorna Stories.

Raptors undertand humans (but not the other way around) because raptor's on Isla Muerta are intelligent enough, along with being assigned one ranger to watch them for the first year, to have experienced human-speak and understand its numerous meanings.

Super predators (t-rex, giganto, normal spinos, and baryonx) do not understand smaller dinosaurs easily, due to the difference between the intelligent dinos and the large dinos. Similar to the carnivore / herbivore issues.

Note to Godzilla Forever's last post:
But I normally take suggestions, and we all saw how much your suggestions helped me finish Doom Island book 1!
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Postby Godzilla Forever » Sat May 29, 2010 4:49 pm

Looks good so far, and I'll gladly give you any suggestions that you need.

Spinoraptor sounds cool. 8)
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Postby raptor33 » Mon Jul 12, 2010 8:58 pm

It gives me great pleasure to declare the newest wonder of the modern fanfic, Chaos Island: Newcomers, now closed.

Wanting more? You may possible be forced to wait. I won't jump straight into Chaos Island: Downfall until after I finish making a little History for Chaos Island.

Be on the lookout for Chaos Island: Arrival before you miss it!
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Postby Evil Eye » Mon Jul 12, 2010 10:05 pm

Why is it you announce your chapters like that? :P
Too much JPOG
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Postby raptor33 » Mon Jul 12, 2010 10:18 pm

Most definately.

And... anything you care to say about the story or are you just distracting me from the E-War so I get killed?
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