Shadows of the Abyss

Have you got a game, book or movie you'd like to make a story out of? Want to expand on a story or plot that stopped? Have an original idea for a story that you want to post somewhere? Here's where to do it. Basically an RPG where one player controls ALL characters in the story.

Postby Godzilla Forever » Mon Aug 23, 2010 4:04 am

Thank you. It took me a while to develop Charybdis' character, and I will continue the story sooner or later.
"If none can know what lies ahead, then losing one's way is just human nature."~ Yoshimitsu

"Would you hear my desire? To take this foul blade, and use it to blot out the light forever!" ~ Ganondorf
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Postby Godzilla Forever » Sun Aug 29, 2010 4:12 am

Chapter 6's up! Here we go.....
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Postby Godzilla Forever » Fri Sep 24, 2010 11:27 pm

Chatper 7's up! I got bored and decided to write up a little something..... I'll be introducing a new character soon........
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Re: Shadows of The Abyss

Postby Godzilla Forever » Tue Apr 19, 2011 3:24 am

New chapter is up after many, many months.
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Postby Doc 42 » Mon May 02, 2011 7:07 pm

That was interesting. Though one wonders how an enormous lizard thing and a random stranger were able to enter a town, armed to the teeth, without attracting any real attention.

I enjoyed the chapter.


Godzilla Forever wrote:Sorry about that. Sometimes I get overzealous when I type.

And the fact I haven't written a story outside of this site doesn't make typing one easier....

But, thanks for the constructive criticism! Also, what's a niggle?



A niggle, is a small little point of annoyance. It's a very minor complaint.

Basically, there are lots of little points of annoyance in and around your writing, probably down to your inexperience with writing stuff like this on a keyboard.
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Re: Shadows of The Abyss

Postby Godzilla Forever » Fri Jun 17, 2011 4:00 am

What's this? Another chapter? Indeed it is!
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Re: Shadows of The Abyss

Postby Giratina93 » Fri Jun 17, 2011 8:43 am

So far, this intrests me quite abit! This is quite the good read, though the inconsistancy of time tense is a little... rattling.

keep up the good work, G4E!
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Re: Shadows of the Abyss

Postby Godzilla Forever » Tue Sep 20, 2011 4:14 am

Chapter ten is up. it's a simple chapter, just meant to kinda get the characters together.
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Re: Shadows of the Abyss

Postby Giratina93 » Wed Sep 28, 2011 4:21 am

Keep going, G4E! This story is coming togethe quite nicely...
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Re: Shadows of the Abyss

Postby Godzilla Forever » Wed Sep 28, 2011 4:25 am

Thanks. Might try to update it this week. We'll see, though.
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Re: Shadows of the Abyss

Postby Doc 42 » Mon Oct 03, 2011 10:00 pm

Clichéd, ridiculous, but all the more enjoyable for it. Nice easy reading. I liked this.
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Re: Shadows of the Abyss

Postby Godzilla Forever » Mon Oct 03, 2011 11:23 pm

@ doc: Thanks! Was aiming for cliched (I'm lazy, I know XP), but I didn't expect ridiculous.
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Re: Shadows of the Abyss

Postby Doc 42 » Tue Oct 04, 2011 10:46 pm

ridiuclous often goes hand in hand with cliché.

For example, the 5 guards all managing to decapitate each other when chary ducked. Depending on the tone of the story it can be a good thing or a very bad thing. In this it's the former, it suits the atmosphere.
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