The mans dead!

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The mans dead!

Postby Nemisb1002 » Tue May 22, 2007 10:38 pm

One day, 15 raptors came to the time we live in. They started by killing anyone they could find. The packleder,Cicktail, Gave the orders. Person after person they cied all of them... Cicktail had a fight with another raptor,Slasher, The two had razor sharp claws, but Cickail is best with his tail, and Slasher is good with claws! So the two started by growling at each other, then Slasher made the first move. A massive claw hit Cicktail, and Cicktail hit Slasher back with a whip of his tail. Then Muscles, the trainer and arm builder of the pack, came in and stopped the fight...But it was to late, Cicktail was dead. 'The mans dead!' Muscles said, he did want to leave, but with Cicktail as well. Slashers best mate, Nemisis,came out to find out what happened, but Slasher was gone, Slasher had run of, leaving the rest of the pack to find him, but he was not in there time anymore, he was back home at last. Nemesis, was looking for him as best as he could, Then he thought he might have gone back to there time.Mucels, had said that if he did, he would not come back here, but Nemesis did not care, he just wanted to see his frend again.....But before Nemisis could enter the warp, he was ambushed by his own comrads, Cicktail was there! Nemisis closed his eyis, whating for his death. When he opend, they were gone, he thought they were here, but it was a marigh.... Nemisis stepted thought the portal.
Esplage!
5 Dys later, Nemisis found his mate,Slasher. the othere part of the pack did sepret ways and got killed by people. Muscles became a pet of a family and looked after him, And that is that, I hoped you like it!
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Postby Stallordasaurus Rex » Tue May 22, 2007 11:29 pm

THe beginning needs alittle improvement. aBUt the rest is good!
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