Divided Loyalties

Have you got a game, book or movie you'd like to make a story out of? Want to expand on a story or plot that stopped? Have an original idea for a story that you want to post somewhere? Here's where to do it. Basically an RPG where one player controls ALL characters in the story.

Postby TyrannoTitan » Thu Aug 02, 2007 12:51 am

Awesome, more twists! Almost a fight. Keep it up!
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Postby Iceking » Thu Aug 02, 2007 12:53 am

i think that chapter six is very good. its amazing that the deputy would try to blame the clans leader for a death.
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Postby Hopeflower » Thu Aug 02, 2007 6:09 pm

Thanks for the comments, peoples.

Next chappie's up! ^_^
"Gotta have a little sadness once in a while so you know when the good times come."
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Postby Shadow » Thu Aug 02, 2007 6:19 pm

Very nice story HF, I can really tell who the characters are. :)
When you want it the most there's no easy way out
When you're ready to go and your heart's left in doubt
Don't give up on your faith
Love comes to those who believe it
And that's the way it is
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Postby Doc 42 » Thu Aug 02, 2007 6:25 pm

As Shad said, good charcater development. But its kinda hard to keep track of all of them.
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Postby Shadow » Thu Aug 02, 2007 6:36 pm

I remember the main ones like LeapordClaw and FireClaw.
When you want it the most there's no easy way out
When you're ready to go and your heart's left in doubt
Don't give up on your faith
Love comes to those who believe it
And that's the way it is
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Postby TyrannoTitan » Thu Aug 02, 2007 6:43 pm

Very nice. As said, more characer development, which is awesome. Keep it up.
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Postby Hopeflower » Sat Aug 04, 2007 12:21 am

Thanks for the supportive comments, next chappie is up!

(D*** brain-deadness...couldn't type for a while today)
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"Talent is a pursued interest. In other words, anything that you're willing to practice, you can do." ~ Bob Ross

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Postby TyrannoTitan » Sat Aug 04, 2007 12:51 am

Awesome! More twists...I like...

Keep it up.
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Postby C S » Sat Aug 04, 2007 12:53 am

i hate you, dispise you, almost die when i say your name (Yes, your so close but so far...)

but this


THIS IS AWSOME!!!!!!

*torches my fan-fics*
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Postby Hopeflower » Thu Aug 09, 2007 5:36 pm

Thanks for being patient everyone! Next chappie's up.
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Postby Doc 42 » Thu Aug 09, 2007 8:29 pm

What the hell?!?!?! I actually felt sad when they said Foxtail was dead. only ever time that has happened was in Hp, when Siris died. Your good.... Bramble clam is awesome, hope to hear more about them latter.
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Postby TyrannoTitan » Thu Aug 09, 2007 9:12 pm

Ya...Awesome, yet sad chapter....Great work, HF.
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Postby Hopeflower » Fri Aug 10, 2007 3:46 pm

-folds arms- Well, thanks for the comments people, but this chappie was hard to write. Might be the last one for a while 'cause I've got writer's block...
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Postby C S » Fri Aug 10, 2007 3:48 pm

me too, and my jaws fan fic
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Postby Doc 42 » Fri Aug 10, 2007 3:55 pm

It seems Streamclan just got chucked in the cooking pot. I hope you get over your writers block soon.
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Postby TyrannoTitan » Fri Aug 10, 2007 10:53 pm

Awesome, Streamclan is in some deep **** now :P

Great work, HF.

Too bad about the writers block...
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Postby Hopeflower » Sat Aug 11, 2007 1:18 am

AHA! Inspiration struck a few minutes ago and I actually wrote another chappie. Amazing what a bit of Snapple and a few french fries can do for your writing.

Anyways, next chappie's up! Thanks for the comments peoples.
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"The future is always uncertain and painful but it must be lived." ~ Unknown
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Postby TyrannoTitan » Sat Aug 11, 2007 1:20 am

Awesome chapter. Definately epic, the conversation.

Great Work.
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Postby Doc 42 » Sat Aug 11, 2007 1:46 am

omg! its a ghost! lol looks like Silvermoon is perfectly ok about the whole being dead thing and she enjoys taunting other warriors about powers but not explaining them. Damn Ghosts :P Cool chapter
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