I look upon the arrogant.

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I look upon the arrogant.

Postby Giratina93 » Tue May 25, 2010 11:20 pm

Jus ta little something that I had to do for English...

I looked upon the arrogant,
The proud without a care.
Their hearts are turned away from you,
And violence they wear.

They speak against you, Lord, and yet
They’ve wealth and strength and power.
Why do you let them triumph now?
Come, Lord, this is the hour!

In vain, then, have I kept your laws
And lived a righteous life?
For I am weak and sick and poor.
Each day brings only strife.

But when within your temple, Lord,
I understand aright.
Their path is dark and leads to death,
Mine to eternal life.
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Postby Godzilla Forever » Wed May 26, 2010 1:47 am

That was impressive!!! That was true poetry, gira.
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Postby slashmaster101 » Fri Jul 09, 2010 11:54 pm

sorry i dont like it because im athiest
I don't know how much I can take
The secret thoughts inside me wake
I've lost what was within me
Oh sweet insanity- Disturbed, Perfect Insanity.

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Postby Evil Eye » Wed Sep 01, 2010 7:34 pm

slashmaster101 wrote:sorry i dont like it because im athiest

So? I'm more of one, but that doesn't mean I cant appreciate some pretty good poetry when I see it, as in this case.
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Postby slashmaster101 » Wed Sep 01, 2010 11:06 pm

the point is i just dont agree with it but it is a good poem gira so sorry if i offended you :(
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Postby Godzilla Forever » Wed Sep 01, 2010 11:15 pm

Ah, but you said you disliked it, no? So you like it but disagree with what it's saying?
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Postby slashmaster101 » Wed Sep 01, 2010 11:22 pm

well... yeah i guess :?
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