Fear and Insanity

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Fear and Insanity

Postby Tediz » Sat Jan 03, 2009 7:38 am

I just sat down and wrote this... Wrote it as I went along. I made this stuff up on the spot, but this is about how I feel right now... What do you guys think of it?

You look at me now like I'm some kind of Clown,
What the hells wrong with me that you must be so down.
Like I'm some sorta crazy psychopathic ****,
Like I'm some kinda ******* poor old *** muck

Well **** you man, **** you true,
I'm not an some stupid little ally boo.
You think you know what I've done all along?
You think you know what makes me yell out in song?
Run at the night?
Howl at the moon?
Scream and Yell and Jump all around?

**** all these posers and ******* Boo Boos.
I'm not Insane, I'm just afraid.
Afraid for my life like a bug in the rain.
You don't know, what I've been through.
You don't know, what makes me love you.

I'm just some Kid yelling out for some help.
I'm just a puppy kicked while he yelps.

I ain't no ******* hero now my friend.
I'm starting to feel small as a fly.

Do you know, why they make me laugh?
Do you know, why they make my mind crack?
It's all coming down, like some crippling force.
I'm starting to think you think I'm a work horse.

Beat as a Child, Herald as a King,
Still wanting to scream out and sing.

It's all coming down, like some crippling force.
I can feel my mind snapping like a bone of remorse.
I think you can now officially call me Insane.
But you still do now know why I scream out in Pain.

It's Fear my friend, Fear yes it is.
Fear of me him her us and you.
Fear of dying, Fear of being alive.
Fear one day I'll be eaten alive.

If I'm insane then I have the right,
To Fear what I want and Fear what I must.
Fear has caused me to go Insane.
But you still do not know why I scream out in Pain.

You'll never know until you open you're eyes.
Open them my friend and see my true insides.
Do you see there, beyond all the Gloat and the Pain?
Do you see there, buried like Mud in the Rain?

That's what it is, if you'll open you're eyes.
Fear and Insanity has taken over my mind.
Be not forgetful to entertain strangers; for thereby some have entertained angels unawares - Hebrews 13:2
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Postby chook151 » Sat Jan 03, 2009 10:16 pm

Sounds like a linkin park song :shock: . Still cool, but after listening to those types of songs over and over you kind get sick of the rhyming.
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Postby Tediz » Sat Jan 03, 2009 10:17 pm

It's more of a Poem than a song... I dunno why I posted it here to tell you the truth.
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Postby chook151 » Sat Jan 03, 2009 10:19 pm

ok the, well if thats what ist is, THATS FRIKEN AWESOME! :D

(By the way, shoudn't this be in poetry and co. section?)
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Postby The Kingpin » Sat Jan 03, 2009 10:32 pm

moved to Poetry & Other Written Arts


and i must say, this, my friend, is beautiful. very powerful. you can feel the emotion in it. it's not just some random stuff that was blurted out and slapped together. no. this is art. this is written art. to use one's mind, literary skill and emotions to construct written art. that is what this site is all about. RPGs, Poetry, Stories. it's things like this that this site was made for. as for the rating, i'll give it a 9/10, and that's just because it needs a few touch ups near the top and perhaps a modified line here and there. otherwise, it's brilliant. good work, Tediz :)
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Postby chook151 » Sat Jan 03, 2009 10:39 pm

Yeah, i would give it 9/10 too. Though not for the brilliance, just because it would be a kickass song.
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Postby Buwx » Sat Jan 03, 2009 10:54 pm

That was deep bro...
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